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Twice a month, Sol Magazine sponsors poetry contests. From the
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Also posted are additional features and articles.
Our topics touch a variety of subjects about nature and the nature of
humanity. Our purpose is to educate poets, and to foster the reading
and writing of short poetry. We are not a vanity press. Not
every poem submitted will be published.
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CONTENTS:WELCOME
LETTERS TO THE EDITOR
POETRY WORKS: COMPETITION POETRY
TOPIC ONE: FIREWORKS
SPOTLIGHT: Words Elude Me. . . A review.
NATURE
ALPHA POET'S CONTEST: AMERICA - LOVE IT OR CHANGE IT.
WELCOME: Nicki Miller, Sam Siegel, Jay Stinson, Andrea M. Zander.
MIXED FEELINGS: Had a slight stroke and very large ruptured disk at the end of March and have been trying to get back to where I was then ever since. Just had our first two grandchildren get married within six weeks. What fun! They both wanted poems to read at their weddings. Beverly Steward, Santa Barbara, CA |
SAD NEWS: Adelaide W. Ferguson, a member of the Daughters of the American Revolution, Romance Writers of America and the Bay Area Writers League in Seabrook, Texas, passed away on June 23, 2000. |
POETRY WORKS
An editorial by Mary Margaret Carlisle, Managing Editor |
Competition poetry - what is it all about? It is about writing
the very best poem possible, with no grammar or spelling errors, rules
followed, and a deadline (timelimit) met.
Sometimes this means writing to set forms and themes. If you are asked to write a cinquain, do not turn in a quatrain or a haiku. If asked for a title, do not use the topic as an easy out. Titles that grab the reader may be given a second look by a judge. When requested to use a certain topic, do not give weight to any other subject unless comparing or contrasting. If asked to speak of the moon, why bring up the beauty of the ocean, unless to explain how that body of water showcases the moon's glory? |
Rending the silence of the darkness
With bright color and booming sound
Rainbows shape and fall to the ground
The capstone to our nation's birthday
Michelle Angelini, Pasadena, CA
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Patriotic Thrill
The sound of Sousa marches is throbbing by.
Rockets whistle, crackling bursts design
flags and petals across the darkened sky.
Patriotic shivers scamper down my spine.
Roberta Pipes Bowman, Fort Worth, TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Engages multiple senses through hearing, sight,
feeling; creative diction with verbs - throb, whistle, design, scamper.
This poem obeys the journalistic rules of giving the reader something to
see, hear and feel, telling us who, what, where and when by the end.
Excellent work.
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THIRD PLACE
After the Show
I close my eyes momentarily: tired, smiling,
And pink and white neon lines still
Etch the sleepy darkness behind my lids
This early fifth of July.
Coke Brown Jr., Fort Worth, TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Making this a personal account
carries us along in a more intimate manner.
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Lost Meaning
The drama of death for freedom
Fades in the burst of bright celebrations
When a nine-year old pauses from his Game Boy
To define forth of July 4 as - "Fireworks"
Don Castiglioni, Galveston, TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Dramatic comparison.
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HONORABLE MENTION
Pacemaker
One kiss
Sent his heart soaring, throbbing
To the staccato rhythm
Of fireworks on the Fourth of July
Lois Lay Castiglioni, Galveston, TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Clever interplay between title and body of
poem. The irregular, interrupted rhythm of this poem reflects the
irregular, interrupted pattern of fireworks. Nicely done!
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Patriot's Echo
Cannon volleys quake the earth
Shatter silence of the night
Spatter sky with colored light
Stir echoes of freedom's birth
Helen David, Stamford, CT
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Well done description of a difficult topic.
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SECOND PLACE
Inspiration
Amish quilts, like fireworks against the night sky
pair complimentary colors on a field of black
adding brilliance to hues that alone
fade into the ordinary
Diane M. Davis, Chelmsford, MA
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Vivid analogy between the brilliant hues of
Amish quilts and those of fireworks, both set against a black background.
The skilled use of words paints a pattern that is visible to the user...nicely
done.
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Pride
Kaleidoscopic patterns
Of red, white and blue fireworks
Send ripples of national pride
Through the flag waving crowd
Kay Lay Earnest, Smyrna, GA
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Stirring account of this event.
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Shattered Stars
Sparklers bob back and forth through fields
held tight by bright-eyed children
who wait for darkness to descend
and shattered stars to thrill them.
Maryann Hazen-Stearns, Ellenville, NY
JUDGES' COMMENTS: The pace carries us along for the ride.
A sweet picture, chubby hands waving sparklers. This poem relies
on the power of anticipation to weave its spell.
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Freedom
Joining stars up in the sky
Brilliant sparks above the trees
Floating freely in the breeze
Celebration--fourth of July
Julia Jarmusz, Fort Worth, TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: The fireworks float like flags in this sky.
Nicely written.
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Independence
Flares of rockets soaring high
Up into the nightly sky
Sizzling bursts of starry light
Blazing runs boom and ignite
Elinor Burger Kapsar, Hazelwood, MO
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Visual effects well done.
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Immortality
Shimmering streaks and thunderous rolls
Herald freedom's celebration
Unextinguished sparks of those brave souls
Who died for our emancipation
Kathy Kehrli, Factoryville, PA
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Good use of rhyme. Poem does a nice job of
reminding us why we're being treated to fireworks displays. The third line
is simply lovely. Good solid rhythm and rhyme. This poem strikes
to the heart of the holiday's
significance, honoring those who gave their lives as "unextinguished
sparks." Beautiful rhyme and easy reading. Let us always remember
our freedom's celebration, and those souls who died. The first line
is a firework all its own.
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FIRST PLACE - Winner of a $20.00 electronic book gift certificate
Sacrificial FlowersJUDGES' COMMENTS: This poem relies on a simple line scheme to create the impact of brevity. Phrasings are lovely, haiku-like in their shortness of phrase, but the rhyme strengthens the lines' shortness. The phrase "fire flowers" is a unique way of viewing fireworks. The personification of the sky as being "startled" parallels that first delicious jump we always experience with the first thunderous boom of fireworks. The tie from present to past is neatly done in the last two lines. Excellent use of "eagle's eye" to illustrate freedom and the looking forward to a new nation.
Fire flowers blossom
against a startled sky,
reminders of past sacrifice
made in a eagle's eye.
C. Lawton-Livingstone, Colchester, UK
Array of color
Fireworks burst in the sky
Sweet dreams to the once blackened night
Now engulfed by this rainbow of light.
Nicole Nostramo, Elmwood Park, NJ
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Visual effects well done.
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Competition
From the bandstand
watching the fireworks
compete with the
shooting stars.
Janet Parker, Leesburg, FL
JUDGES' COMMENTS: This poet became part of the action.
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HONORABLE MENTION
Heavenly Reminders
Fourth of July fireworks outdo the stars, fill the sky--
Ooh, Aah--we gasp, then suddenly solemn, remember
The primary color of their costs, red--red--spectacular
Singular flashes of courage, splattered on earth.
Sarah Quigley, Galveston, TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: An outstanding effort. The last two
lines are wonderfully written. Double meaning of "primary" is very
clever, and the repetition "red--red" is startling and clever as well.
Last line is almost a poem in itself. Superb.
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America's Birthday Party
Gasps, applause greet the night sky magic,
Freedom explodes in thunderous technicolor,
Shooting stars freefall and fade to billowed puffs,
Onlookers share flashbulbs of unity waving red, white and blue.
Mary Pat Raferty, Sugar Land, TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Visual effects effectively described.
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Highlighted Memories
Bright fireworks fall from heaven above
In celestial cascades of light,
In moments, the colors will all disappear--
Yet be remembered for all of your life.
Lynne Remick, Nesconset, NY
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Impressive point (the colors may go, but be
remembered) contrasting fleeting colors and lasting memories.
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Fireworks
Children's laughter muffled
by rapid gunfire delight;
prismatic strobe-lights
created by multicolored lightning.
Brenda Roberts, Fort Worth, TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Imaginative use of highlighting and specialized
lighting effects. The title of this electric piece is our only clue
that this poem is about anything other than nature.
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Shared Celebration
Thousands of watchings crowd nearby locations,
then thundering displays soon cover this nation
with crowds joined together in hushed sound ovations
as each cannon's flash frees our colors' celebration.
Craig Soderquist, Universal City, TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Eloquent word painting of this universal event.
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Sweet Patriots
Lollipop salutes to the Fourth
Little ones thrust their candied pointers skyward.
Gleeful squeals punctuate each fireworks pop
Fall silent as the sky drips color.
Patricia A. Tabella, Providence, RI
JUDGES' COMMENTS: The field of small children awed by the fireworks
made this judge laugh. Love the second and last lines. Very
imaginative.
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HONORABLE MENTION
This Fire, Works
Black powered puffs pop and poof, seek to fill
A darkened, highrise, domed, expectant sky.
Faces of Americans, silhouetted celebrants,
Illuminate, reflecting bright, continuing hopes.
Claiborne Schley Walsh, Montrose, AL
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Clever title, positive message of hope accentuates
our hopes for the future. Excellent title. A clever play on
the old word; wonderful alliteration in the first line, as well as
descriptives of the sky in the second. Excellent parallel between
the independence and fire of the fireworks as mirrored in the hope found
in Americans' faces and hearts. Here, the symbol for independence's
celebration becomes the reflector of the continuing hopes of a nation.
Well done.
SPOTLIGHT:
by Jean McAllister, Book Reviewer |
Amazing! That is the opening of one of the many rich and surprising
poems in this quite stunning three part collection by Paula White.
This particular poem, among others, is untitled. Its exclamatory
beginning takes hold of the reader's imagination, running pellmell through
the brief lines while one wonders WHAT is so amazing? This is a most
arresting and effective verbal ecstasy about a regular springtime phenomenon.
The first section, "Words. . .," includes a rip-roaring, long, but well-sustained
diatribe against Virginia Woolf. Called "Disbelief," the poem provides
a power-punch against the undefended novelist for never having written
a poem. The concise and unusual diction of White's poems brings Gerard
Manley Hopkins to mind.
In the middle section, "Elude. . .," there is a striking portrayal of
the heartbreaking legend of Daedalus and Icarus. Given in simple,
archaic-sounding ballad style, this poetry is sweetly affecting.
White reveals a strong passion for the drama and grace of her faith,
and these elements are beautifully expressed in several poems in the third
section, "Me. . ." "Illumination de la Coeur" (Illumination of the
Heart) might resonate with anyone whose heart is assailed by the seemingly
overpowering bleakness of the world. There is hope and light, and
even the tiniest sliver is enough.
The range of poetic styles in White's work, from simple rhymed verse
to extremely complex blank verse, studded with internal rhyming and near-rhymes,
attests to the maturity, vitality, and imaginative power of this poet.
Readers will be enriched, wherever they dip into this lovely collection.
To see samples of White's work (AKA Paula M. Bentley, Assistant Editor
of Sol Magazine) go to http://www.crosswinds.net/~catpoet
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She dances as she
sculpts a garden out of silk
sowing deadly ground.
Ron Blanton, Smyrna, GA
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Lovely to read. Mystical.
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HONORABLE MENTION
white dandelions in grass
seeds explode away and
ride the wind
Coke Brown Jr., Fort Worth, TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Summer! Vivid picture. Powerful
images, excellent action, good flow. Life giving life.
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HONORABLE MENTION
tree full of gold
migrating
monarchs
Lois Lay Castiglioni Galveston, TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Excellent description. Rich image in
few words. Excellent use of alliteration. Memorable scene.
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city park in May
thick perfume of gardenias
pigeons strut in dust
SuzAnne C. Cole, Houston, Texas
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Restful description. Strong and engaging
imagery.
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take one deep breath first
look now at something nearby
revere its nature
Warner D. Conarton, Zephyrhills, FL
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Good advice. Often taken for granted.
A prayer in three lines.
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Warm summer breezes
usher waves
to shore's embrace
Helen David, Stamford, CT
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Nice visit to the beach. Peaceful scene.
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rose bush chopped at the roots
greens again
choosing new possibilities
Diane M. Davis, Chelmsford, MA
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Hope reigns.
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frosty window pane
crackling fire
warm heart
Emily Katherine Earnest, Smyrna, GA
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Delighful. Like a Christmas card.
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phlox fold leaves to stem
praying for
end of drought
Kay Lay Earnest, Smyrna, GA
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Excellent vision of leaves folded in prayer.
Good imagery. Poet uses alliteration and consonance nicely.
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zing on wing in spring
tiny Hummer comes to feed
slights my sight in flight
Maryann Hazen-Stearns, Ellenville, NY
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Rhyme is not used in Haiku, but was effectively
used in this triplet. Light and playful mood. Lively.
Clever last line.
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Catfish in the pond
Nibbled at a worm
Summer meal on the farm
Julia Jarmusz, Ft. Worth, TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Original. Peaceful. Cycle of life
well told. Simple imagery, lilting cadence, use of assonace and consonance
throughout to create a connected flow in sound and image.
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Blazed summer heat
Flowered gardens defeat
Wilted brown dying
Elinor Burger Kapsar, Hazelwood, MO
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Good description.
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Milky white and gold
Waltzing in the summer breeze
Daisy dance delight
Kathy Kehrli, Factoryville, PA
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Good alliteration. Such a fragrant dance.
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salt marsh overflows
sea-lavender growing wild
curlews call me home
C. Lawton-Livingstone, Colchester, UK
JUDGES' COMMENTS: A pleasant moment.
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at the water's edge
solitary blue heron
glides in slow motion
Janet Parker, Leesburg, FL
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Good description of graceful flight.
Peaceful.
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bones litter the earth
in a jigsaw
puzzle of death
Mary Pat Rafferty, Sugar Land, TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Wonderful language, fresh look at the mystery
of death.
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Stretching and yawning
Hedgehog peeks out at the dawn
Life awakens now
Lynne Remick, Nesconset, NY
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Vivid description.
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flowing waves of wings
cardinal egrets bluejay
patriotic flight
Brenda Roberts, Fort Worth, TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Unusual, picturesque. Color and action.
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HONORABLE MENTION
dark summer vultures
sit barren branches brooding
over stagnant pools
John E. Rice, Houston, TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Portrait well done. Adjective laden triplet
is vivid.
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HONORABLE MENTION
magnolia blossom
bee prying
red tipped stamens
Adelaide Socki, Houston,TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Summer picture. Poem like a perfect picture.
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waterfall crystals
cascade light misted shadows
water flowing down
Craig Soderquist, Universal City, TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Feel the water! Cooling scene.
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low sanguine sun
melts into a warm ocean
beachgoers head home
Patricia A Tabella, Providence, RI
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Beautiful language. Fresh description.
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fragrant rain showers
nests bursting with life anew
tulips, daffodils
Leigh Tate, Greenville, NC
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Wish this were in my back yard.
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snow adorns mountain
sun melting drifts once again
streams sparkling anew
Bill Truax, Cedar Hill, TX
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Beautiful picture. Clean scene.
Lovely word usage.
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FIRST PLACE - Winner of a $20.00 electronic book gift certificate.
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Excellent metaphor, fresh description. Strong to the senses.
wind's long syllables
whine with cold exclamations
punctuated with snow
Claiborne Schley Walsh, Montrose, AL
Andrea M. Zander, Rochester, MN
JUDGES' COMMENTS: Unique event presented well.
Here we stand, America
and Ptolemy, at the center of the Universe.
Copernicus and Galileo must weep for us.
All powerful - respected by few.
Wealthy. So wealthy. So stingy. Sybaritic and
slothful, we shrug and turn away, ignoring those
ghostly shapes in dusty catacombs of the Past:
Relics of The Everlasting Roman Empire, rustling restlessly,
whispering and chuckling, heads wagging wisely -
they know what's coming. Do we?
John E. Rice, Houston, Texas
JUDGES' COMMENTS: This poem presents the decline of America set
against the backdrop of another great empire. Excellent impact in
the last three lines. Particularly noteworthy is the use of alliteration
and adverbs to create a poem that rolls off the tongue and enlightens the
mind. Persuasive reminder of history's cynical cyclical nature.
Simultaneously imaginative and realistic. Vivid images. The
result of this poet's question is that we question, too.
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