Sol Magazine, A Quarterly Poetry Journal. 2006: The eighth year of a ten-year project of volunteers interested in the education of poets.
The dance of light on the pond, the dance of dreams in our hearts, the dance of words on the page. |
Poetry Works | Rejection and the Stupidity of Flaming Pens &
The Common Sense of Getting Paid in Poetry |
by Colin Campbell |
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Hidden Topic: |
(Free Verse) |
(Lyric Poem) |
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(Double Five) |
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(Impressionistic Poetry) |
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Poetry Works: "Rejection and the Stupidity of Flaming Pens" by Mary Margaret Carlisle Poetry Works: "The Common Sense of Getting Paid in Poetry" by Mary Margaret Carlisle (links take you to Poetry Works page) |
Dreams of Old Shanghai by Colin Campbell Each quarter, we choose one poem to honor with the title of EDITOR'S CHOICE. This month we chose: Dreams of Old ShanghaiCOMMENTS: Masterful exploration; thoughtful, insightful, personal yet universal. Beautifully written narrative that seems like personal memoir. |
FIRST PLACE Out of BeirutCOMMENTS: Strong writing brings the reader into the moment, stirs the heart into response. ===== SECOND PLACE Somewhere in the Middle EastCOMMENTS: Clear, direct, no punches pulled, forces the reader to pay attention. ===== THIRD PLACE Poem to ask the Difficult Question, What do I tell his Children?COMMENTS: The lyric beauty of the surroundings are in direct contrast to the raw emotion of the Mother. ===== HONORABLE MENTION America’s PoorCOMMENTS: This political piece is well written as an almost chant that gathers movement and strength as it steams to the end. ===== HONORABLE MENTION We, whom among Earth's populationCOMMENTS: Nicely developed theme. ===== HONORABLE MENTION the city of champions' revolting newsCOMMENTS: The journalistic style of this piece seems at first glance straightforward, yet has undertones of anger in its very particular word choices. Nicely done. |
While language is the common bread of everyday life, it is also meant
to convey higher ideas with a cadence, rhythm and tone born not only of
meaning but also of the sound of the words themselves in melodic and lyrical
language. Poets were asked to write a poem about the way natural
light looks on any natural body of water and to use several lyrical tools
in a down to earth way.
Knee-Deep In SunsetCOMMENTS: Expertly written with unique ideas and excellent phrasings. Sounds repeat, ideas compress and are turned end on end in this complex yet easily understandable darkly lyric piece. ===== SECOND PLACE Tripping the LightCOMMENTS: Excellent title, wonderful lead in, memorable ending, fine comparison in simple exact language. A good example of clear well-written poetry that uses very few words to capture an exact moment. ===== THIRD PLACE WrinklingCOMMENTS: Almost like a batch of Ripley's record-breakers trying to fit themselves into a phone booth, this poem is stuffed with excellent examples of the use of poetic tools. The homophones of "whether" and "weather" bring both a touch of ambiguity of hearing/meaning and an echo of rhyme into the work. The personification of the sun in "moistened rays" with "fingertips wrinkling," gives the poem's title a strong connection to its fine ending lines. Sounds are repeated on each line, then varied on the next, giving the poem a musical feeling of circulating jazz riffs. The lyric quality of the work is sustained from beginning to end. Strong work. EDITOR'S NOTE: A homophone is a word that has the same pronunciation as another word, but whose meaning and/or spelling are different.) ===== HONORABLE MENTION FacetsCOMMENTS: Pure lyricism, with echoes of haiku in its brevity and direct attention to nature. Beautifully written, poet! ===== HONORABLE MENTION Joan’s Tawny BackCOMMENTS: Well-grounded in place, this piece unveils both Joan and the river in luscious lyrical language that flows like water. Nicely done. ===== HONORABLE MENTION Night on the Open SeaCOMMENTS: This lyric poem ends in the endless question, one that may never be answered. Good descriptions of the water, with engaging insight into the poet's mind. ===== OTHER POEMS SUBMITTED ===== MoonlightCOMMENTS: Lovely language choices in this nicely written lyric piece. ===== The ChattahoocheeCOMMENTS: Strong writing betrays this poet's unique talent for narrative storytelling. Well written. ===== While Fishing the StreamCOMMENTS: This familiar picture sparkles on the page. ===== Bay LightCOMMENTS: The careful particularity of word choices invite the reader to speak this succinct piece aloud, where each word trips off the tongue in a fine rhythm so appealing it could become its own form. Sounds echo from line to line, begging the reader to read aloud. ===== Dream StreamCOMMENTS: An entire story well-told in eight brief lines. ===== In the Wink of an EyeCOMMENTS: Beautifully written piece. Nice title choice that leads naturally into the poem. ===== Rio DanceCOMMENTS: Sweetly presented, nicely compared, a jewel of succinct work. ===== Night at de BalletCOMMENTS: Beautiful descriptions of water add to the stronger vision of the ballerina's pirouette. ===== Morning FlameCOMMENTS: Love slips into this piece as naturally as sunshine on water; lovely descriptions. ===== Low TideCOMMENTS: Short, sweet, simply beautiful. |
FIRST PLACE Dreams of Old Shanghai.COMMENTS: Masterful exploration; thoughtful, insightful, personal yet universal. Beautifully written narrative that seems like personal memoir. ===== SECOND PLACE Aquarius, Approaching FortyCOMMENTS: Repeated phrases create rhythmical lullabying cadence. Delicate descriptions bring the poet and reader into closeness. ===== THIRD PLACE - TIE The Counter Girl at Oishi’sCOMMENTS: Nice movement enhanced by repetitions of the same sounds. ===== THIRD PLACE - TIE Young LionCOMMENTS: This poem has an earthy sensuality presented in highly descriptive multi layered images. Nicely written. ===== HONORABLE MENTION DreamsCOMMENTS: Well described narrative that includes some impressionistic touches of feeling. Nicely done! ===== HONORABLE MENTION Within the Folds of Early DawnCOMMENTS: Thoughtfully crafted powerful images, both stated and implied, create a complete portrait. ===== OTHER POEMS ===== Miracle of Love Dreams of the young
Love did find me
Sharon Alsop, Clinton, MO, USA
Her eyes are frightened and moist although
Her spaghetti gets as cold as her father’s
SJ Baldock, Lancaster, TX, USA
Each spring
Finding John's letter in my mailbox
Lois Lay Castiglioni, Galveston, TX, USA
Off-beat humor
He exhales dreams
RJ Clarken, Hillsborough, NJ, USA
From head-to-toe and front-to-back
He's passionate and fun to squeeze
Shelley Culver, Benton, KS, USA
One hint of your smile
One hint of you
Betty Dobson, Halifax, NS, CAN
He runs his school with iron hand
His days of reign like books have closed
Carol Dee Meeks, Artesia, NM, USA
She enters the dawn of blessedness
She is a beacon in the storm
Jeanette Oestermyer, Rochester, IN, USA
tender woman
legacy of
Eileen Sateriale, Bowie, MD, USA
Loving a stranger from a distance
and also by one who stands distant
Katherine Swarts, Houston, TX, USA |
Impressionistic poetry is meant to present a broad idea rather than
a particular description; to write in this way, a poet must interpret an
impression rather than clearly capture reality, and imply a response to
a feeling rather than describe the actual feeling, or mirror not an object
but a reaction to an object, or write about some indistinct notion or recollection
in a fluid, richly colored way. This form demands that poets abandon
the journalistic style of writing that most of us depend upon, an extremely
difficult task for poets trained to be recorders of details, and accustomed
to providing every who, what, where, and when of each moment.
Shards of Glass, Torn ApartCOMMENTS: This is a beautiful example of an impressionistic poem. No clear picture of a person has been provided, yet a very definite mood has been set where the reader is left with an indistinct yet strong impression of someone's essence. Excellent title, fine writing to a difficult form. ===== SECOND PLACE Old SoldierCOMMENTS: This portrait is so diffuse that all we see of the soldier is a description of what is not seen; a classically impressionistic poem that gave an interesting approach to this complex form. ===== THIRD PLACE Angelic PerfectionCOMMENTS: This portrait without narrative details points clearly to the impressionistic style. Well done. ===== HONORABLE MENTION Hidden TalentCOMMENTS: Close attention to impressions and feelings brings the reader into the action without providing too many of the details that might be given in a narrative poem. Good writing. |
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