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MARCH JUDGES
MARYANN HAZEN-STEARNS
BETTY ANN WHITNEY
MARCH SPONSORS
LOIS LAY CASTIGLIONI
LOUIE LEVY
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From Janet Parker:
In memory of Fletcher L. Parker, "Now absent from the body...but forever present in the spirit." |
From Lois Lay Castiglioni:
Dedicated "to poems whose hearts dance with daffodils," a line appropriate to spring, in honor of William Wordsworth. |
From Louie Levy:
By helping to sponsor March's issue, this poet says he hopes to encourage others to become Sol sponsors too. His dedication is to "Love." |
MARCH'S FEATURES
A Good Read: Delmore Schwartz: The Life of an American Poet", a book review by Craig Tigerman, Editor-in-Chief.Glossary: When 'Perfect' is 'Full' it's Rhyme," by Betty Ann Whitney, Poetry Editor.
ON THE WEB: "Homegrown and Heartfelt," a web review, by Craig Tigerman, Editor-in-Chief.
CONTENTS
LETTERS |
FROM: JUDITH SCHIELE, BRANDON, MS: Just a note to thank you for the gift certificate. What a wonderful surprise for my first cinquain! My poetry book arrived today. Again, thank you! Although I did not advance in the [Poet Laureate 2002 Round Two] competition, I want to thank you all for the honor of having been a part of it. I haven't a clue why writing decided to come to me so late in life, or when it will come again. Since I've never attempted to "write on command", it was very difficult indeed for me to come up with poems for the first round. Your magazine has prompted me to explore. I thank you again for having me as a part of your group. |
SAD NEWS: One of Sol Magazine's Poetry Judges, "Doc" Parker, passed away earlier this year. He will be missed by all who knew him. |
FROM JANET PARKER, LEESBURG,
FL: Because I feel so close to you, I wanted to let you know that
my Doc passed away on February 20. He did judge for you on a couple
of occasions and he was always interested in Sol Magazine.
Doc was a Chiropractic Physician. In MA where he practiced, many of his patients referred to him as the Gentle Giant. Doc did not submit many poems for publication, but he never received a rejection slip... I believe it was because all of his poems were from the heart. To My Doc |
AWARDSFIRST PLACE - Winner of a $20.00 electronic book gift certificate.
PersistenceJDUGES' COMMENTS: Beautiful language, lovely representation. Creatively draws exquisite, delicate images that are contrasted with more intense, solid forms. Vivid imagery andPuncturing their icy blankets,
Premature jonquil blooms
Pierce the white monotony,
Paint snowscapes with dots of possibility,
Patches of yellow bright enough to
Push winter deep beneath
Palettes of melted memories.Roy Schwartzman, Maryville, MO, USA
SECOND PLACE - Winner of a $15 electronic book gift certificate.
HarbingerJUDGES' COMMENTS: Metaphorical journey through sharply animated detail. Succinct depiction of stubborn winter and the glad-tidings of spring.How tenaciously snow lingers,
Hanging onto boughs,
Hovering over eaves,
Hushed against hoary fences; but
Hyacinths burst forth in sweet victory --
Herald faith robed in spring. Again,
Hope comes from within!Avonne Griffin, Greer, SC, USA
THIRD PLACE - Winner of a $10 electronic book gift certificate.
TantamountJUDGES' COMMENTS: Vividly portrays the romantic side of inner love. Lovely alliteration and cadence portray the hope of spring.Tulips bring thoughts of
Two lips meeting in Spring.
The promise of love, of passion;
This is what keeps me going.
There, while snow is still aground,
Those peeking buds
Throw my mind months ahead.Claiborne Walsh, Montrose, AL, USA
HONORABLE MENTION
YellowJUDGES' COMMENTS: Personification packed with strong emotion. Joyful vignette of hand-me-down spring bulbs.Years ago my mother planted the bulbs
Yearning upward they herald spring
Yard gladdened by sun-bright blossoms
Yet this year the weather is manic
Yields fat flakes on fragile flowers
Yellow tubes trumpet joy, undefeated
Yes! The legacy of daffodils lives onMary E. Gray, Newport News, VA, USA
HONORABLE MENTION
HarbingersJUDGES' COMMENTS: Lightly sprinkles the spirit of spring. Delightfully song-like upbeat rhythm.Hyacinth blue
Hugging the snow,
Happily smiles
Here from the cold.
How many times
Have we passed here this winter?
Hidden in ice, lay the secret of spring.Katherine Swarts, Houston, TX, USA
EDITORS' CHOICE
LagniappeEDITORS' COMMENTS: These lovely languorous lines lift the heart as well as the spirit. Excellent title choice garnishes this delicious and satisfying poem.Lily of the valley with its
Little bell flowers dangling
Like small heads bowed for prayer
Lifts my housebound spirit as no other
Late-blooming, winter-hardy blossom can
Last to leave earth's snowy embrace, we
Lament its passing until again called forthSJ Baldock, Lancaster TX
OTHER ENTRIES COMMENTED ON BY OUR JUDGES AND/OR EDITORS
CrossedCOMMENTS: Dramatically portrayed. A beautiful collection of flora, condensed into a colorful snapshot of spring.Confusing, when the ground
covered by snow on Palm Sunday.
Crocus on the way out, do not care.
Camellias consider the source; but worry
camas will bloom white instead of blue.
Calla lilies withdraw behind
crosses carved of wild cherry.Gary Blankenship, Bremerton, WA, USA
SiblingsCOMMENTS: Personification and photographic images stretch and turn each line delightfully. Alliteration abounds with visual phrases and deft use of form.Surely Spring mistook the
Signs of longer days.
Southern winds kissing Winter's cheek.
Singing birds flirting and flitting.
Sun filled skies sketching branches with buds.
Scolded by Winter's reproof she tucks
Snow Bonnets upon her children's crowns.Ron Blanton, Alpharetta, GA, USA
TapestryCOMMENTS: Well developed and pleasant rhythm and rhyme. Vivid landscape of powerful images.There upon a frozen earth
Three tiny purple heads emerge,
Thirsting for spring's life anew
Threaded delicately amid the snow.
They lick away a place to grow,
These the noble birthed in power
The tiny, crocus mighty flower.Linda Louise Creech, Bellefontaine, OH, USA
NarcissismCOMMENTS: Gentle portrait of a favorite garden delight.Narcissus
Never think twice about
Nudging her
Nose into thin ice to
Nod in the snow and cold
North winds knowing that
Nice compliments will shower her.Lois Lay Castiglioni, Galveston, TX, USA
EphemeraCOMMENTS: Precise word choices lead the reader through this finely crafted work.Easter's hopeful blooms
Ease through belated snow,
Each stem, leaf and petal
Etched as on white canvas,
Eager to impress, perhaps
Earn a place of
Ephemeral permanence.Betty Dobson, Halifax, NS, Canada
SurpriseCOMMENTS: Energetic rendering moves this succinct offering along, yet invites a second reading.Seasons
Seem out of
Sync when
Scillas
Sprout in winter warm
Spells and blossom in
Showers of snowKay Lay Earnest, Smyrna, GA, USA
LifeCOMMENTS: Had this poem been more clearly to the given topic (Blossoms in the Snow) it might have garnered a placing. Excellent writing, interestingly presented.Lackadaisically I move along
Love has left me
Lairs await me on every turn
Liars greet me with
leisurely lecherous smiles
looking for a way to
light my worldSharen Marie Hansen, Oshkosh, WI, USA
HeraldingCOMMENTS: Good word choices. A rhythm that carrys the reader to the end wanting another verse just to read more aloud. Well done.Hidden beneath the
Hard packed ice, royal buds
Hearken to life.
Harrowing through winter's
Harsh freeze
Hyacinth's regal bells
Hail spring.Kathy Kehrli, Factoryville, PA, USA
SilentCOMMENTS: Vivid writing, beautifully and painterly presented scene.Scarlet bells glow in
Sierra Nevada snow drifts,
Shooting up like asparagus
Standing beneath the pines.
Snow plants, sentinels of loneliness
Stiffly avoiding fragrance, coldly watching
Spring arrive.Deborah P. Kolodji, Temple City, CA, USA
TulipsCOMMENTS: Finely crafted, meant to be read aloud, and slowly savored.Tiny bulbs planted last fall, spawning
Twenty-four red and green
Tulips near the juniper;
Trying to break through snow and ice
To greet, with sunkist hues,
Towns-folk passers-by,
Tip-toers of the snow-bound blooms.Tanya Larson, Kamloops, BC, Canada
SameCOMMENTS: Thoughtful portrait of love that seems to have outlived both winter and the loss of a friend. These simply rendered lines expose the deeper heart. The poet shares faith in life-after-death that puts the reader directly into the scene. Nicely written.Snow was one of her favorite things.
So were flowers, so I planted
Sun flowers around her grave.
Surprise, surprise,
Sprouting in the dead of winter.
Smiling up at me, as I cleared some snow to
Sit and talk to her, I see she still loves both.Alma Philbert Linton, LaSalle, PQ, Canada
PreviewCOMMENTS: This poem brings a smile and sweetly brushes away the lingering effects of winter.Peeking from beneath a fresh
peak of snow
purple crocus
push their way above the ground
perhaps ill-advised
performing to
promises of an early spring.Janet Parker, Leesburg, FL, USA
Petal PushersCOMMENTS: Gives a chill to the reader as these poor peonies regret their early rising.Probing, prying, prodding earth
Petals push and peek
Prematurely popping out
Petals shrink and squeak
Poor, poor petals peeking out
Proving groundhog wrong
Patriotic peonies, beneath a winter storm.Lynne Remick, Nesconset, NY, USA
OpuntiaCOMMENTS: Solid writing! Wonderful word choices move with an underlying cadence that advance and retreat with the weather as described.Our prolific prickly pear
Occasionally finds its
Oval viridian foliage, its
Oblong floras amarillas, so proud and
Optomistic in early March,
Obscured by unexpected snowfall as Winter's
Ogre grudgingly gives ground to Spring.John E. Rice, Houston, TX, USA
CalendricCOMMENTS: Interesting first words almost make a poem among themselves.Confused young bulbs,
Carefully planted in fall
Cautiously peep out and
Create colorful blooms.
Callously crushed by
Cold white blanket.
Calendar of winter
Collaborate with nature.Eileen Sateriale, Bowie, MD, USA
JubileeCOMMENTS: Good writing makes this poem on the transition between winter and spring a treat to read.January lay low and teased with
June like breeze.
Jonquil jumped forth
Just as winter reemerged.
Jogging past, I pause to savor,
Jot a mental note and shout
Joy! in the beholding.Judith Schiele, Brandon, MS, USA
IllusiveCOMMENTS: This excellent narrative shares an intimate moment in the life of the poet.Ill-timed, my rising. Shaking,
I rid myself of dreams, scurrying,
Ignoring the perk of coffee,
Imagining more of yesterday, pessimistically
If’ing my way through the door,
Innocently looking for winter’s last muddy dreariness.
Illusionary finding, first beautiful blossom of spring...Barbara G. Scroggins, Williston, VT, USA
Cold FrontCOMMENTS: So beautifully written, this poem begs another reading. The words roll around the mouth, and spill out in a celebration of its own.Chilled wind, my unexpected
caller from the bitter North
creased the delicate folds of
crocus in its
crystalline fury
ceasing spring's early
celebration.James M. Thompson, Baytown, Texas, USA
DancingCOMMENTS: Hopeful, indeed. This poet brushes off winter with cheerful floral colors and the hope of better weather ahead.Dreary days pass
Dreamily, white snow
Dropping, drifting onto
Daffodils; golden sentinels
Dancing winter away;
Distinct signs of hope to
Dying seasons.Gillian Wilkinson, Saxonwold, South Africa
DaffodilsCOMMENTS: Good word choices decorate this piece.Delaying remnants of snow can not
Dormant your root
Driven up by Mother Nature’s
Desire to
Decorate her earth,
Dutifully you climb up
Delighting all with your peaks of green.M. E. Wood, Belleville, ON, Canada
AWARDSFIRST PLACE - Winner of a $20.00 electronic book gift certificate.
TransCanada MoonJUDGES' COMMENTS: In this poem, dynamite language explodes fresh spontaneity, leading the eye across a delightful morning with a variety of powerful, unexpected visual effects. Beautifully written in a clear yet metaphysical way. Entrancing narrative welcomes the reader to join in as traveling companion. Excellent use of hyphenated phrases carries the reader along for the ride.Moon over small-town Canada and drawn-out
mustard fields as far as the windshield sweeps,
on this sun-yawn-to-stretch morning, holds my
sleep-starved gaze like a transcendental tractor-beam;
as the moon plays cat-and-mouse with the storm clouds
rolling in over the highest peaks of the heavens-bound
TransCanada Highway; And the world seems asleep
but for the big rig passing on the left and the smiling
crescent moon at dawn.Tanya Larson, Kamloops, BC, Canada
DreamscapeJUDGES' COMMENTS: Expressed with a pictorial simile creating a tranquil mood. The final line hinting at the old familiar Lamplighter's cry, "All is well!" brings a nostalgic glow to this lovely portrait.Just as evening paints the sky
with brilliant crimson's fiery glow,
the warmth of blankets spread upon
my world entices me
to sleep in sweet abandon there,
hair spread upon the feathery quiet.
I slip into a purple shroud of dreams,
the sun at dusk convincing me
beyond a shadow of a doubt --
all is well.Linda Louise Creech, Bellefontaine, OH, USA
TrueJUDGES' COMMENTS: Captures the grand scope of a relationship by describing the natural wonder of a smile. Precise use of rhythm and end rhyme.Never a harsh word would you say.
Never a twisted brow my way.
Happy to greet me with open arms.
You do not play games or offer worldly charms.
Your face so full of light.
Your mind quick and bright.
Happily I can remember your face.
Delightful and full of grace.
Are my memories hurtful? Never.
There resides your smile forever.M. E. Wood, Belleville, ON, Canada
Why We Didn't Fly the New KiteJUDGES' COMMENTS: Clear and warm as the time of day (noon) each element compounds the allure of the last. Something to see, to feel, to hear, a full range of plesurable emotions accompany this visit to the beach. Well written! Beautifully rendered, warm account of an afternoon at the beach.Sand underfoot,
warm grains to burrow into
until our feet reach the wet,
cooled to dampen the heat
of the ocean at noon.
Winds still cool from morning,
rhythmic music of surf
sun on our bare heads,
our feet dug deep into sand,
we sleep through noon at the ocean.Gary Blankenship, Bremerton, WA, USA
A winter evening's stroll on the bayfrontJUDGES' COMMENTS: Reflective pause moves serenely across a "watercolor" sky. An "as told to" story, a lovely gift from the narriator to the reader. Clear images, internal rhyme, alliteration and sound combine to create a lovely poem.Only clouds recall the sun at dusk;
its warmth is a pink-orange memory now.
A brisk breeze riffles the tides’ flowing rush.
In the east, the evening star already shows.
Swooping low, a honking heron calls.
I hear a splash and glimpse a flash of silver as twilight falls.Mike Gregory, Corpus Christi, TX, USA
PromiseJUDGES' COMMENTS: Inspirational piece illustrating the promise of sunset's return. Concise lines and line breaks give this poem an almost prayer-like quality.The sun at dusk
still warm from noon
hints of a new day,
a covenant between we two
that, although this day is spent,
another day waits
beyond that golden streak
where the sun just
left the sky.Janet Parker, Leesburg, FL, USA
OTHER ENTRIES COMMENTED UPON BY OUR JUDGES AND/OR EDITORS
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Sky WalkerCOMMENTS: Lyrical, gentle, soulful. First and last lines envelope the poem, as well as reader, while the skillful cadence of the work ties it all together.The moon at dawn - almost full
Lends me a warm pool of light
To gather the morning papers.
She follows old footprints
On her journey across the sky.Lois Lay Castiglioni, Galveston, TX, USA
Lemon SkyCOMMENTS: Georgeous colors, beautifully rendered, painterly. Clever twist from militant to a minor's memory enhances this colorful poem.The sun at dusk washes
Over the even sky,
One night a cosmic fire
Flashing red and orange,
Calling fresh warriors to
Dreams of glory, the next
Night turned palest yellow,
Soft as tapwater lemonade
And long summer days
Without end in young eyes.Betty Dobson, Halifax, NS, Canada
Grand Canyon ConnectionCOMMENTS: An unusual "connection" made, breaking the steriotypical view of American Indians as stoic, unshowing emotion. Picturesque snapshot moment reuniting past with present.As the sun at dusk brushes canyon walls with crimson
Smiles steal across chiselled faces of the Indians leaning on wind
sculptured pines
Blasts of warmth wash over them
As ancestors toast this daily ritualKay Lay Earnest, Smyrna, GA, USA
JasperCOMMENTS: The short lines convey the sense of breathlessness and passion, anchored by the repetition of the first line toward the end of this piece. Endearing sentiment.Your smile forever
keeps me alive
always hoping
loving and living
Always wanting to be more
never reaching the goal
of who I am to be
But I am happy
because your smile forever
lights my waySharen Marie Hansen, Oshkosh, WI, USA
AriesCOMMENTS: Lots of alliteration, inviting the reader to dwell on each line of this piece. Repetition of phrases like "Opens up..." and "Are the..." adds to the effect. Touching poem that pulls at the heart strings.A miniature moist mouth
Opens up to reveal it
A spacious shiny set
Are the teeth that sit inside
A tiny tool that travels to the tip
Opens up the set of teeth
A heartfelt hint of hunger
Are the feelings of my lips
A love like the lust of living
Opens up your smile foreverAudrey Hardy, Fullerton, CA, USA
DecrescendoCOMMENTS: Another look at the fascinating phenomenon we call Dawn.An orb of light,
A lunar glow
That fades away
As darkness slows.The moon at dawn,
A bathing ray
That dimly wanes
To sunlight's blaze.Kathy Kehrli, Factoryville, PA, USA
Morning MomentsCOMMENTS: A tranquil cinquain with clear, vivid word-pictures.Waking
the moon at dawn
watching its sideways smile
vanish as the rest of my world
rises.Deborah P. Kolodji, Temple City, CA, USA
SoupCOMMENTS: Drawing attention to the details of what makes working in a soup kitchen such an act of charity. Unafraid look at our human condition with its chattering dentures and running noses.Your smile forever taking shape,
through chattering dentures.
As trembling hands clasped,
like in a thankful prayer,
the cup of soup extended.
While my caring hands dabbed a napkin,
to your running nose.
You poor, old, cold, soul.
As you wandered from the bitter streets,
to the shelter, I'll forever, remember.Alma Philbert Linton, LaSalle, Quebec, Canada
Silent SentinelCOMMENTS: The poet deserves much credit if only for the ability to "run" so soon after waking!I awaken,
Wipe the sandman's
Dust from sleepy eyes.
I run to my window,
And look up to see,
The moon at dawn,
Still watching over me
From its throne
Above the horizon,
And I smile.Lynne Remick, Nesconset, NY, USA
Just Before DawnCOMMENTS: Nice extended alliteration in lines 5-7.In that limbo-land, that
transitory season of just
a few days before our winter's
half-hearted attempts at cold
yield to searing, summer heat,
the sad, silvery, scimitar
smile of the moon at dawn refracts
through the west wing skylight, spreads
its faint spectrum where we sleep,
where it's always warm.John E. Rice, Houston, TX, USA
Color MysteryCOMMENTS: Celestial phenomena hold us in awe, despite all our science. Lovely title.Blinding orange orb
suspended in the western sky;
the sun at dusk.
Studied by astronomers for centuries
and awed by common folk today.
We squint our eyes at
the fiery ball descending
on its celestial path
knowing that in a few short hours
the sky turns pitch black.Eileen Sateriale, Bowie, MD, USA
GrinCOMMENTS: A loving ode to a man whose smile is his nickname, who won this lady's heart.1200 miles away,
I used to dream of a day
When I would wake each morning
Feeling your amazing grin heat the room we slept in.
Now, I feel it warm me every morning, every night,
Each time our eyes meet across dinner or breakfast…
Today, I dream serenely, rising to smiles
wrapped firmly round, strong as angel’s wings.
I know that I have found my heaven
Wrapped warmly in your smile forever.Barbara G. Scroggins, Williston, Vermont U.S.A.
PassageCOMMENTS: Longingly, the writer looks to a time when the moon marks mornings together instead of counting lunar months apart.The moon at dawn a reminder to me
The passage of time--this desert of time--
With me without you.
Thirteen full moons--my lucky number--
Surrender my sentence,
Return me to you,
And warm reunion's impassioned embrace--
Forever then viewed
By the lonely passage
Of each dawning moon.Craig Soderquist, Riyadh, Saudi Arabia
Morning TwilightCOMMENTS: Well-described single moment in a busy sky.The sky glows orange and gold.
The sun’s eyelash peers from the edge of the world,
The first hint of warmth in the cold.
Venus shines in the east,
A stubborn star hangs in the sky to the west,
And beneath that star, framed by a morning bird’s song,
Smiles a golden globe,
A globe cold in the sky, yet warm in the heart,
The moon at dawn.Katherine Swarts, Houston, TX, USA
The Open CurtainCOMMENTS: Interesting imagery, "the curtain of the mind." Lends itself well as the key phrase around which this fine piece is built. Nicely transitional juxtaposition of imagery in the billowing curtain, heavy worries, and shifting silver light.A mind fogged by sleep
And worldly worries,
Is hazed and heavy;
The curtain of the mind
Billows in the darkness
And softly, silently
The silver, shifting light
Of the moon at dawn
Threads sane solutions
Into the coming day.Gillian Wilkinson, Saxonwold, South Africa
THE FIRST TIME
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Grandmother'sJUDGES' COMMENTS: Heartfelt and touching use of narration creates a moving poem for the reader, unfolding slowly to its natural anticlimactic conclusion. Rekindles vivid memories. Simple and engaging, this poem brings the reader into the author's personal experiences spanning decades. Summarized cogently in nine lines.The first time I can remember
we stood together at your kitchen sink
and I learned of teaspoons and tablespoons.The first time I hated your old stories
I was a teen and heard them with my friends
for the ten-thousandth time.The first time I truly understood loss
was beside the casket, when I told
those stories for you, one final time.James M. Thompson, Baytown, TX, USA
Invisible WindJUDGES' COMMENTS: Carefully composed vistas contribute to the atmosphere of this fresh dialogue.After the nursery rhyme era of my life
the first poem I remember
is "Who Has Seen the Wind?"On the prairie where I grew up
the wind blew whimsical gusts all time--
night or day without ceasing.As a child, I wanted to see the wind
described in that first exquisite poem.
Now those lines recall a happy time of youth.Roberta Pipes Bowman, Fort Worth, TX
Flying Away from the NestJUDGES' COMMENTS: Closely integrated. Three verses of narrative seen from different vantage points. Pleasantly crafted slice of Americana using beautiful metaphors and succinct images. Lovely craftsmanship.The first time I drove
my mother's 1964 Ford Falcon,
I thought I was ready to fly and be on my own.When you were born, I was the first
to touch you in your incubator nest,
your tiny little fists curling around my finger.Now, it's your turn to learn to drive
my 1994 Olds Achieva, I hide tears
for the day you fly away, leaving me alone.Deborah P. Kolodji, Temple City, CA, USA
An Abused ChildJUDGES' COMMENTS: Intense anaphoric content progresses neatly to its final devastating line. Extraordinary work.First to be yelled at
First to get spanked
Firstborn of family was of first times as theseFirst to start school, thus
First to go to the principal's office --
First to try to explain the bold, black bruisesFirst to talk back, likewise
First to rebel
First to attempt suicide; then first to succeedSJ Baldock, Lancaster TX, USA
HandsJUDGES' COMMENTS: Tight verse about grief and loss reads as a symbolic cemetary honoring Grandpa. On-topic, with two "first" life-experiences then tied together in the third, poignant stanza. Good use of rhyme, tying the title in with the final word of the poem.Dinner date, white patent shoes
Tied for the first time by my hands.
"Hey Grandpa, did you hear my news?"Wrinkled hands placed 'cross your chest,
I prayed they'd move, just one last breath,
But Grandpa, it was time to rest.Life's little gifts, its precious sands,
Time tinges us with joy and grief
Then swiftly shifts its hands.Kathy Kehrli, Factoryville, PA, USA
OTHER ENTRIES COMMENTED UPON BY OUR JUDGES AND/OR EDITORS
GenerationsCOMMENTS: Time turned backward -- illustrated emotions without too much sentimentality.The first smile knocked me off my feet,
though you did not smile my way;
then you laughed.Her first smile stole my heart,
though she was too young to know me;
then she cried.After so many years, you still sweep me away,
your gift to me still wraps me round her finger,
and her gift to us smiles like the first.Gary Blankenship, Bremerton, WA, USA
Life JourneysCOMMENTS: Pensive and gentle, this piece shares the inner questions we all have about whether or not we will be accepted as we age.Miles melted away as the bus roared
through mountains then passed fields,
into a new town that first time.Time became the enemy, advancing age
visible now upon my once youthful face.
If only we'd met years ago.But friendship turned a blind eye, seeing
only hearts and souls between them.
First women, friends, sisters of the soul.Linda Louise Creech, Bellefontaine, OH, USA
Deep BreathingCOMMENTS: Precise phrasing and word choice are coupled to create a compactly constructed portrait. Vividly colorful.I took my first breath in a hurry, deeply
Impatient to be born, anxious to get started,
Then measured time at my own slow pace.My first taste of freedom became a bitter pill
Washed down by backseat beer. I ignored time
And held my breath during confrontations.Time's a little faster now, demanding more yet
Giving less, and drawing on that first deep
Breath to feed the last, long, slow exhale.Betty Dobson, Halifax, NS, Canada
Wipe OutCOMMENTS: Interesting progression of three themes. There is an underlying sensuality to this work, gracefully shown.Salty slaps against my face --
I rode his board with first-time grace.
I didn't know we had to race back in!Challenges of form and theme
first made me gasp, then made me dream.
I have to say, it didn't seem I'd win.Sitting on the beach alone,
I wiggled toes in sand and foam --
Then took the time to trace my poem again.Avonne Griffin, Greer, SC, USA
I know not of a memory without youCOMMENTS: A love story in three verses. Nice use of rhyme. The homey touch of ending with a home-cooked meal makes this story sweet without being sentimental.My first born, she brought me joy
The same amount as my first boy
Because they were with my first loveMy childish ways had come to cease
The day I signed my first lease
Which happened to me with my first loveMy cooking seemed like such a big deal
The time my first lasagna was the meal
Because I was making it for my first loveAudrey Hardy, Fullerton, CA, USA
Mixed EmotionsCOMMENTS: The overt topic is friendship, but the underlying value is about loyalty, something one can only hope for in most friendships.The first time I auditioned for the glee club
the teacher shook her head no
I was devastated.I was the first one my friend told
that she had been accepted
we celebrated her joy with a banana split.She had assumed I had been accepted
as my best friend she did not join
for the first time I learned the value of a true friend.Janet Parker, Leesburg, FL, USA
Love in Three ScenesCOMMENTS: Smile provoking, with interesting and unique tidbits of everyday life.The first time you drove me in your car,
It wasn't for a soda, or a stolen kiss, but
To laugh beside you at a "Jerky Boy" movie.You first put my hand in yours, so softly,
So nonchalantly, while we were sitting, side
By side, watching "Legends of the Fall."On that first Valentine's Day, just three
weeks after our very first card ride, you
gave me your heart. And it's still mine.Lynne Remick, Nesconset, NY, USA
Life FlightCOMMENTS: Lovely writing, developing different aspects and meanings of "flying." Beautifully integrated thematic material, subtly different from verse to verse.When I was ten and first sent away
to school, I flew alone, far from home,
on wings as yet untested.Another time I flew away
to Greece and Spain, on tested
wings of a silver plane.Yet never did I fly so free
until the day we first flew away
on moonlit wings, above a silver plain.John E. Rice, Houston, TX, USA
Thrills and More ThrillsCOMMENTS: Nicely developed. Effective twist at the end.Dear sister, I remember the time
Mother gave birth to you.
I was thrilled to be a big sister.Two years ago, you gave birth
to your son, my only nephew.
It was the first time I became an aunt.I watch your son and remember
The time you were little and all the firsts.
I'm thrilled at the second chance.Eileen Sateriale, Bowie, MD, USA
Messy ErasureCOMMENTS: Well-written in a terse, but thought-provoking style. Revealing portrait of the narrator. Nice word choices, with some wonderfully interesting and totally unexpected alliteration.First trip to the Appalachians:
heard you could see five states from Lookout Mountain.
No dotted border lines, no proof. Demanded refund.First all-nighter, no surrender to sleep.
Good-night kisses only drowsy imprints
of clumsy closure, fizzled reassurance.Last time I hit the backspace key
backpedaled into illusions of clean slates,
faint traces of regret the signature of adventure.Roy Schwartzman, Maryville, MO, USA
Learning to LearnCOMMENTS: Progressive portrayal of independence and courage depict the emotional side of growing up. Well done.First day at school,
Shy yet brimming with excitement.
Through good times and bad, I would learn confidence.First year at college,
Free yet feeling lost.
Through independence, I would learn balance.First time on my own,
A graduate student, yet a frightened child.
Through each new experience, I would learn maturity.Katherine Swarts, Houston, TX, USA
Path of TimeCOMMENTS: This story swiftly skims through a sorrowful tale.First we fell in love, despite all odds.
Against an angry sea we overcame
We persevered until you wore black and I in white.Time travelled on, two eventually turned three.
Our love grew wings and solidified into a new form.
The house we share mutiplied in laughter.First there was glee, which transformed to tears.
Three became two, one despairing night
The shape of our love has flown away forever.Venus Tadrzak, Lakewood, OH, USA
The Ultimate HappinessCOMMENTS: Interesting approach to the use of the words "time" and "first."First Lady Mrs. Time pronounced out loud,
"You should throw down from a designated cliff
all your worries, problems, doubts."But, first, you'll gather them, grade and scale,
last time you can indulge yourselves with grief,
then you should collect all tears in one huge pail.""Oh, genius, Mrs. Time, like a working horse, wearing blinders,
and being unable to look and fool around,
we'll be happy and nothing will ever confuse our mind."Natalia Zaretsky, Wharton, NJ, USA
Grandmother'sJUDGES' COMMENTS: Heartfelt and touching use of narration creates a moving poem for the reader, unfolding slowly to its natural anticlimactic conclusion. Rekindles vivid memories. Simple and engaging, this poem brings the reader into the author's personal experiences spanning decades. Summarized cogently in nine lines.The first time I can remember
we stood together at your kitchen sink
and I learned of teaspoons and tablespoons.The first time I hated your old stories
I was a teen and heard them with my friends
for the ten-thousandth time.The first time I truly understood loss
was beside the casket, when I told
those stories for you, one final time.James M. Thompson, Baytown, TX, USA
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