April 1999 Winner's Edition

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Sol Magazine (C) 1999
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Twice a month, Sol Magazine sponsors poetry contests, and from the results, produces an electronic poetry magazine, published on the last day of each month.  The winners are posted to our website at:
http://pages.prodigy.com/sol_magazine

Our topics are on a variety of subjects about nature and the nature of humanity.  Our purpose: to foster the reading and writing of short poetry, and the education of poets.
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Welcome: Joyce Badger, Joe Blanda, Debra Cochran, David E. Cowen, Nico Crisafulli, Renee K. Driscoll, Lisa Grable, Danielle Lovell, Neils Overgarr, April Ritz, Cynthia Saxon, Brett Shifflett, Kathleen M. Walker.
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We are proud to announce that "Metaphor and Simile:  Night and Day," by Craig Tigerman and Betty Ann Whitney, Assistant Editors of Sol Magazine, has been accepted for publication in the May Issue of The Amateur Poetry Journal.  APJ is edited by Judy Gripton.  See this well researched article at
http://amateurpoetry.virtualave.net

Send email to jude@sanasys.com for submission guidelines.


TOPIC ONE:  COMIC OPERA TITLE

This contest was judged by committee.  We give thanks to friends at the Galveston Poets Roundtable, and our Assistant Editors.
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FIRST PLACE WINNER OF $5.00 BGC FROM B&N
"Hamlet and Eggs", A Grand High Cholesterol Opera
"Hamlet" by Thomas

Lois Lay Castiglioni, Galveston
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HONORABLE MENTION
"The Marriage of Fig Newton," snackers opera (refreshments incl.)
"The Marriage of Figaro", by Wolfgang Amadeus Mozart

Nico Crisafulli, Seattle, WA
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HONORABLE MENTION
"Barber of Amazons", Comic Opera (Barber Chooses Bad Location.)
"Barber of Seville", by Gioachino Rossini

Kay Lay Earnest, Smyrna, GA
Poet's Note:  "The female black widow spider consumes her mate."
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SECOND PLACE - WINNER OF A BOOKMARK
"A Farewell to Arms", The Venus de Milo Story.
Title of book by Ernest Hemingway

Milton S. Earnest, Smyrna, GA
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HONORABLE MENTION
"Missed My Rate," the comic opera of Sister Kate's investments.
"Kiss Me Kate" by Cole Porter (which was based on "The Taming of the Shrew" by Shakespeare)

James W. Lay, Calhoun, GA
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Honorable Mention
"La Poem", girl's comedic struggle in high school Composition
"La Boheme", by Puccini

Danielle Lovell, Houston, TX
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THIRD PLACE - WINNER OF A BOOKMARK
"Silence", Avant garde, minimalist opera with very short libretto

John E. Rice, Houston, Texas
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HONORABLE MENTION
"The Hangman's Loose", former executioner escapes from asylum

Patricia A Tabella, Providence, RI
 


OUTSIDE VIEW - "Gather 'Round" 
a poetry review by Jean McAllister

"Gather 'Round Me Riders," Epic Motorcycle Poems, by Mark Edmonds and Ernie Williams (narrated on tape with musical accompaniment).
Produced by Mark Edmonds, St. Leo, Florida.

A large motorcycle roars to life, shifts up, and moves off down the highway.  This evocative sound perfectly ushers in the country baritone of the narrator/poet Mark Edmonds, whose almost hypnotic voice leads you down the highway of his motorcycle odysseys.

Edmonds tells about rides he's taken, ticking off place names from border to border and coast to coast, flickering by like telephone poles.  He breaks rhythm now and then to chronicle the weather; he battled a storm: wind, cold and rain springing "eye-high" off the pavement as he strove to keep going until night.  The poet articulates a brand of American individualism where a person just does what he needs, and doesn't bother to explain, perhaps because he doesn't know why himself.

Ernie Williams provides guitar and banjo accompaniment through the four "epic" ballads, a backdrop which emerges at times to create a change of mood or pace.  Poems and music are a co-creation.  The laid-back "roadspeak" narration combines with the haunting folk instruments weaving in and around the words, yielding plaintive, bluesy, and even deeply spiritual effects.

These are not quite romance ballads, but are a sort of cross between the ballad of Simon McGee and Jack Kerouac's On the Road.  As the soul of the rider is not to arrive, but to ride, so the atmosphere of these poems is like simply moving on down the road.

Edmonds has also written a book of short stories, "Longrider".


TOPIC TWO:  FRIENDSHIP - COUPLET - 
Judge:  DANIELLE MURR

A couplet is a unit made of two lines of poetry of the same meter that usually rhyme.  For more on this topic, see our April Contest Edition.
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FIRST PLACE - $5.00 book gift certificate from B&N

Unspoken

My friend reads my thoughts like pages from a book
Tom sends me his opinions with one unspoken look.

Don Castiglioni, Austin, TX
Editor's Comment:  This succinctly speaks of a long-standing friendship, where communication no longer completely relies on spoken words.
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Health - HONORABLE MENTION -

When, like a fern, I wither and bend,
Yours is a hand to quench and amend.

Nico Crisafulli, Seattle, WA
EDITOR'S COMMENTS:  This excellent example of "couplet" is true to form in both meter and rhyme.  Well worded.
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TOLERANCE - HONORABLE MENTION

Far beyond skin and flesh and bone,
Accepting all. We're not alone.

John Rice, Houston, TX
EDITOR'S COMMENTS:  Interesting how the meter moves this along. Social and spiritual commentary.


TOPIC THREE:  SPRING - HAIKU - 
JUDGE:  DANIELLE MURR

From "The Handbook of Poetic Forms," edited by Ron Padgett:

Haiku

1)  almost all involve nature
2)  words and expressions are simple
3)  relate to things directly
4)  no metaphors or similes
5)  with almost no adjectives

Some say Haiku must have 17 syllables arranged 5/7/5 in lines 1, 2, and 3.  The fact is that traditional Japanese Haiku poets count "sounds," not syllables.  The 17 syllables of the traditional Haiku take about the same length of time to say as 12 to 15 English syllables.  Most North American Haiku poets write haiku in
English with fewer than 17 syllables.

Today many poets simply write Haiku in three short lines.  NOTE: Haiku is untitled, so when looking for your favorite Haiku in a book, it may be listed by its first line.
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HONORABLE MENTION

raking leaves in spring
unwrapping gifts of nature
leaping from the earth

Joyce Badger, Eureka Springs AR
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FIRST PLACE - $10.00 bgc from B&N

yapping new-born beaks
stretch sunward awaiting food
no time for singing

Roberta Pipes Bowman, Ft. Worth, TX
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THIRD PLACE
yellow goblets flare
on fleshy green cactus pads
hill country spring rain

SuzAnne C. Cole, Houston, TX
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SECOND PLACE - $5.00 bgc from B&N
chick pecks at his shell
new life stretches and wakes up
winter folds his tent

Lena S. Norman, Saginaw, TX
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HONORABLE MENTION
birdies  eagles  pars
greens smoothed  azaleas banked
the Master's Tournament

Carlyn Luke Reding, Austin, TX
Editor's Comments:  the first time I've associated the Mater's Tournament with spring...lovely comparison!
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HONORABLE MENTION
bumbling buzzing brown
clumsy clowns  heralds of spring
junebugs have returned

John E. Rice, Houston, TX
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HONORABLE MENTION
budding magnolia
pregnant promise
fragrance filled future

Beverly Steward, Santa Barbara, CA
Editor's Comment:  Nice alliteration.
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HONORABLE MENTION
fronds of new willow
gently sweep the sprouting grass
mounding twigs for nesting

Patricia A Tabella, Providence, RI


Recently, Bev Walton-Porter's "Suite 101" featured an essay by Mary Margaret Carlisle.  Entitled "Write now.  Right now!" the article may be found at the following URL:

http://www.suite101.com/article.cfm/1639/18644

 


TOPIC FOUR: "THE FOURTH DIMENSION - TIME" - 
JUDGE - DANIELLE MURR

HONORABLE MENTION
Self Delusion

Trouble is, we are betrayed by clocks
and calendars conspire to do us in.
All the cream lotions and all the pink pills
cannot put lost youth back together again.

Ted O. Badger, Eureka Springs AR
Editor's Comments:  on the other hand, ice cream with pink sprinkles can put a bounce in this gal's halting step!  I really like the line "calendars conspire to do us in."  Deadlines make us all nerve wracked!
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FIRST PLACE - SIGNED COPY OF "FEEDING THE CROW"
Gym Scene

The gym swarms with jocks sweating on treadmills
Climbing steps to nowhere, pedaling bikes that don't move
Yet they scoff at rodents running on hamster wheels
Asking, "Foolish little critters why are you wasting time?"

Lois Lay Castiglioni, Galveston, TX
Assistant Editor's Comment:  Interesting perspective!
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THIRD PLACE - $1.00 BGC FROM B&N
Until The Days

Probably no one ever told Cro Magnon
To meet a deadline
Or to take five
Time is a contrivance of modern man.

Assistant Editor's Comment:  Makes a good point, but we do have much better hospitalization!

Nico Crisafulli, Seattle, WA
Editor's Comment:  I agree.  Long lines, waiting for answers, for deadlines to pass...yes!
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HONORABLE MENTION
Expanse

Tick-tock
Heartbeat
Equinox
Eternity

Editor's Comment:  Succinct, yet packs much information into this compact form.

J C Holland, Ft. Worth, TX
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Balloon

I wonder whether
The fourth dimension
Expands or contracts
Or flattens with tension.

Editor's Comment: nice rhyme scheme, making this piece memorable.

Lena S. Norman, Saginaw, TX
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HONORABLE MENTION
Einstein's Footprints

Sometimes friend and sometimes foe,
Time is neither fast nor slow.
From where we've been to where we'll be
Is simply relativity.

SECOND PLACE - WINNER OF $5.00 BGC FROM B&N
Serbia

A cosmic warp and weft,
Time's bandage is loosely woven.
It may heal wounds - but all?
Some slip through to gape anew.

John E. Rice, Houston, Texas
Sol Magazine's 1999 Poet Laureate
Assistant Editor's Comments:  Highlights the fluidity of time and suggests the tragic aspect of that fact.


ON THE WEB - by Craig Tigerman, Assistant Editor
http://sol-magazine-projects.org/prodigy/craig_tigerman

For a true taste of down-home Americana, Texas style, visit www.virtualtexan.com/comm/virtual/writers/literary/barney/index.htm
and mosey around a spell.  William Barney carries an impressive list of credentials including Poet Laureate of Texas under his ten-gallon hat.  The blurb on this site says he is a poet's poet and a humble man, respectful, careful, understanding and loving the natural world of flowers, birds, animals, landscape, and the made world of people, buildings, events.

Browsing the thirty-three poems offered on this website, I admired Mr. Barney's gift for highlighting the beauty of common things: horses and attendants, sheep and shearers, birds in spring song.

"Singing in mulberry May that resonant thrush
knows such liquidity, I think
he hides in a rain-barrel echo-chamber,
articulating sweet funk
in soft ascending passages a slow mind strains
to gather."
     ("Singing in Mulberry May", William Barney)

This website holds precious reflections of our shared American life, and is well-worth the visit.  Thanks to Naomi Simmons for her note letting us know about this site.


INSIDE VIEW - Free Verse Does Not Mean Without Form 
by Betty Ann Whitney
http://pages.prodigy.com/dandelionsoup

Most of us read poetry for its highly developed artistic excitement through language, and while some techniques seem to work better than others, good poetry usually means good organization or form.

Many poets try to select the most advantageous form in which to frame topics, and some find Free Verse useful.  By mimicking the flow of natural speech, Free Verse conveys the illusion of spontaneity, and is frequently used to express the unique feeling of personal poems.  In Free Verse, "free" means free of metrical
restriction; lines may be of any length the poet chooses.

Two good reference books are Judson Jerome's "The Poet's Handbook", and "The Teachers and Writer's Handbook of Poetic Forms," edited by Ron Padgett.  Both are filled with detailed instruction in the mechanics and art of writing poetry, and answer many of the questions most often asked by beginning poets.


TOPIC FIVE:  NATURE or THE NATURE OF HUMANITY - CINQUAIN - 
JUDGE:BETTY ANN WHITNEY

HONORABLE MENTION
Tea Time

Tulips
Along the fence
Invite us to sip spring
From scarlet demitasse cups
At last

Lois Lay Castiglioni, Galveston, TX
Judge's Comments:  A taste of Springtime through a fresh image.
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HONORABLE MENTION
"All the World's a Stage"

Awake
let not the day
slip unknown far away
to that shore where we may not stay
or play

Michael Cooper, Cool, CA
Editor's Note:  Title is a quote from Shakespeare..."to that shore where we may not stay," speaks of dreaming...
Judge's Comments:  Four lines of rhyme are difficult in this form.
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SECOND PLACE - $5.00 BGC FROM B&N
Cholesterol

Bacon's
Sizzling hot grease
Breakfast odors entice
Eggs over easy drip yellow
Sweet juice

Shelley L. Crabtree, Enid, OK
Enid Writer's Club
Judge's Comment:  mmm...mmmm...good!  You can not only "smell" the image, you can taste it.
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HONORABLE MENTION
Behold

Beauty,
In its most pure,
Not vain or wry mind you,
Is truly something to behold.
Endless.

Judge's Comment:  Nice "aside" in the middle.

Nico Crisafulli Seattle, WA
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FIRST PLACE - $5.00 BGC FROM B&N
Street Corner

Please help!
You can see me
but you don't want to, right?
I'm not ashamed any more - just
homeless.

Judge's Comment:  Really makes you think.

John E. Rice, Houston, TX
Sol Magazine's 1999 Poet Laureate


TOPIC SIX: - NAME YOUR OWN TOPIC - 
JUDGE - CRAIG TIGERMAN

SECOND PLACE - WINNER OF $5.00 BGC FROM B&N
Bovine Bouquet

Fairy-like buttercups
Nodding golden petals
Complimented by every passerby
Waiting to grace the dinner table
Or become fodder for the neighbor's
Cow

Lois Lay Castiglioni, Galveston, TX
Judge's Comments:  The loveliness of the first four lines turns to humorous irony in the last two.  I love the impact of the one-word final line.  (And is it just coincidence that the first letter of the last three lines spelled backwards is also "cow"?)
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HONORABLE MENTION
Fog in a Burnt Field

black etchings on frosted glass
burnt stems budding with dew,
minimal dandelions
waiting
for the wind
to spread their seed

David E. Cowen, Houston, TX
Editor's Comment: Well-written scene charcoal sketched from memory.
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HONORABLE MENTION
After Summer Rain

Looking out screen door
After gentle summer rain
Air cool on skin
Sun shining like a diamond
At sunset
Calm

Dale Ernst,  Mountain View, MO
Editor's Comment:  Refreshing and cool.
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HONORABLE MENTION
Lost Love

I'll smile as I remember,
And with tears that well up in my sentimental heart
I'll say in the years to come:
"That was the dream that I dared not dream,
Those were the feelings I dared not feel.
That was the way it all began."

James W. Lay, Calhoun, Georgia
Judge's Comment:  Captures a defining moment in this person's life with honesty.
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THIRD PLACE - WINNER OF A $5.00 BGC FROM B&N
Searching

Sadly, the placid lake
Reaches out
As it stretches back
To the drear, rain-swollen clouds
Eager to grasp any hand
In its loneliness.

Lena S. Norman, Saginaw, TX
Judge's Comment:  Excellent scene depiction, ascribing feelings and actions to the "placid lake".
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EDITOR'S APRIL CHOICE and
FIRST PLACE - WINNER OF A $5.00 BGC FROM B&N
East End Flats

Up to my waist in warm water,
one eye on cumulus columns
stacking, lightning cracking,
over morning's molten, golden ocean,
the other on a silver spoon: cast retrieve cast retrieve
the mantra does its work.

John E. Rice, Houston, TX
Sol Magazine's 1999 Poet Laureate
Judge's Comment:  Evocative: strongly poetic in its images, internal rhymes and alliterations.
Editor's Comment:  Wonderful - we see the coming storm, feel the limpid languid liquid water, and at the end, paradoxically find meditation through action.  Impressive writing.


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Sol Magazine (C) 1999


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