Sol Magazine
October 2001 Edition


Sol Magazine © 2001


Our topics touch a variety of subjects about nature and the nature of humanity.  The purpose of our all-volunteer organization is to educate poets, and to foster the reading and writing of short poetry.  We are not a vanity press.  Not every poem submitted will be published.  We are a family magazine.  Do not advocate the use of alcohol or drugs in your poetry then ask us to consider your work.  Please read our monthly contest rules for the current themes before sending us your work.
 
 

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SPOTLIGHT - ON CARLYN LUKE REDING
by Paula M. Bentley, Assistant Editor
CURRENT EVENTS 



 
 
DEDICATION
To Gene Hendrix, a Texas Poet and teacher, who writes now with feathers plucked from his heavenly wings.  Your friends miss you.


OCTOBER JUDGES:
MARTHA KIRBY CAPO
SUZANNE COLE
MARYANN HAZEN-STEARNS
CRAIG TIGERMAN
BETTY ANN WHITNEY



 
CONTENTS:
*NOTE:  One of our poetry competitions (FRIENDSHIP) has been extended until November 15, 2001.



WELCOME:  Evelyn Hall, Mike Gullickson, Laura Heidy, Jean Rustle, Rustle Ocre.



 

LETTERS
  FROM:  John Rice - ...Convey to Janet Buck in Oregon how much I admire her work in "This Boot of Death," picked as Best of September and so published. Her metaphorical approach to issues interspersed with subtle use of internal rhyme and alliteration results in graphic, powerful and disturbing imagery.  At the same time there is an overall tone of peace and acceptance.  I don't recall seeing Janet Buck's work in Sol before now. I'm glad she's found Sol - or, perhaps, it's the other way 'round.
Many thanks.  Best regards/John 
  FROM:  Louie Levy - I was told that someone suggested wearing Purple Ribbons that would reflect with it WW2 'Purple Heart' medal for bravery. Had I lost a loved one, the medal would give me questionable comfort. I am a fortunate living veteran of that horrible war. Thank you all your generous efforts to provide a place to express our hearts. 

COURAGE IN THE FACE OF FEAR

FIRST PLACE Winner of a $10.00 Book Gift Certificate from Barnes & Noble

Those Dead

The gods have whispered war, let each sane woman wonder why.
They have no say as men go forth to die perhaps today,
for men are lonely heroes all:  those dead - those still to die.

The gods destroy while women mourn a future passing by.
They have no choice as men go forth to die in disarray.
The gods have whispered war, let each sad woman wonder why.

Strange gods are seeking sacrifice, tho women hear the lie.
They have no say as men go forth to hold those gods at bay,
for men are lonely heroes all:  those dead - those still to die.

Young children wail and old men weep, yet women simply sigh.
They have no choice as men go forth to fight in fearsome fray.
The gods have whispered war, let each brave woman wonder why.

Their silence sings a sad refrain of each unsaid good-bye.
They have no say as men go forth  to conquer distant prey,
for men are lonely heroes all:  those dead - those still to die.

So let the widowed women weep, let history hear their cry.
They've had no choice as men went forth and died too far away.
The gods have whispered war, let each lost woman wonder why
their men are lonely heros all:  those dead - those still to die.

Laura Heidy (Lo),  Highland, IN

JUDGES' COMMENTS:   Beautiful villanelle with unusual iambic heptameter instead of the usual pentameter.  The longer lines keep the reader's attention on the plight of the women who must keep their courage in the midst of so much lethal foolishness. The adroit use of this repetitive form lends a sobering quality to the underlying message of this poem.
EDITOR'S NOTE:  See "Villanelle" in FORMS.
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SECOND PLACE

Faces Lost   Faces Gained

Up   Th      ey   went
skyward      faces gri
m yet k      ind    Up
in   to      light  in
to dark      night  in
day  Ru      in   over
mind fi      re  reign
ing  do      wn  Words
shared       ed   pass
ing  in      the wells
Wells o      f love we
lls  of      tears wel
ls fill      ed with cou
rage un      der  fire
Bravehe      arts knew
no  dir      ection  n
or love      any age or
ability.     From many        One

Ron Blanton, Alpnaretta, GA

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  The way some letters of the words are not "with" the rest of the word--just outstanding.  Gives the reader a strong, visceral sense of the chaos of the moment. Very effective concrete, or shaped, poem. "Fire reigning" is a wonderfully crafted image--among many others in this fine effort.  Repetition of the word "wells," each rendition carrying its own nuanced meaning, is powerful.  Collectively, these repetitions not only add resonance to the poem, they propel the piece forward.  One of the best poems featured in Sol Magazine. Interesting use of concrete poetry to depict recent events.  Very creative in visual presentation, high marks for a poem in the form of twin towers; also for the outcome, the solitary all-important word at the end.
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THIRD PLACE

Should I call?

I dialed
wanting to know
but afraid to ask

the question
hung in the air
like dense fog
on an overcast dawn

I heard
the phone
pick up

She's O.K.
said the voice
even before hello

I sighed
as if someone
had released me
from an over-tight
corset

me too
I answered

Diane M. Davis, Chelmsford, MA

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  This poet has deftly used the natural flow of language along with the structure of terse, immediate stanzas to create a feeling of suspense, which is then skillfully drawn out to the final couplet where the reader may breathe a sigh of relief along with the character portrayed.  Superb craftsmanship!  Short lines hold us in suspense, almost breathless as we, like the people in this piece, wait for the words that will dash hopes or dispel fears.
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Determinations' Lesson

Jimmy almost died of drowning.
His mother faced a difficult decision:
Instill in him a fear of water,
Forbid him to go swimming,
Row in boats and ride ocean waves.

Wise woman chose a courageous path
Pushing her anxiety within, she made The Plan,
Developed a System: the familial circle of sentries.
Assigned her sisters and the older siblings,
Positions in the lake to watch him kick and splash
While they experienced her determination at work
By summer's end, Jim was a swimmer.

Lois Lay Castiglioni, Galveston, TX

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Very nice use of alliteration and narrative to convey a common solution to a universal dilemma. Good story.
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Don’t

Don’t tell me I can’t walk,
when I have not taken a step.
Don’t tell me not to talk,
when I have not said a word.

Don’t tell me I’m not right,
when I have done nothing wrong.
Don’t tell me I must fight.
when I should love my fellowman.

Don’t tell me I will fail,
when I have not even tried.
Don’t tell me not to tell,
when you know I have the truth.

Evelyn Hall, Dayton, OH

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  The intriguing use of negation in quatrain form, along with the repetition of "Don't tell me," and "when," reveal the proud determination of the character portrayed.  Good concept, good use of antiphonal monologue.
EDITOR'S NOTE:  Antiphon:  a verse or other passage sung alternately by two parts of a choir.
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Swallowing Courage

Peering
out in darkness,
fear gnawing my insides
I wish I had Popeye's spinach
to eat.

Deborah P. Kolodji, Temple City, CA

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Humorous cinquain lets the reader admit along with the writer that there are times of such fright in each one's life.  Nice double-meaning and ironic title, too.  Delicate, small poem that effectively captures the way many may have wanted to retreat into a child's world where we could believe, like in the cartoons, what we've all experienced is fiction. Subtle and understated. Lovely. The unique combination of cinquain and clever reference of an "All-American" cartoon hero may entice the reader to smile despite the allusion of danger.
EDITOR'S NOTE:  See "Cinquain" in FORMS.
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HONORABLE MENTION
Diagnosis

I'm sorry - he says. No need - say I.
Thanks - he says. Then I - You're sure I'll die?
No doubt - he says and stands
to go out - another patient. I nod my head,

try deep breathing, try to stand, look for someone
to hold my hand, and find only my own, to calm
my seething fears. I think of Darwin, I don't know why, and
suddenly begin to cry. And stop myself: no tears

for that great god of Nature's orders. Been back and
forth across those borders - more afraid of fear than
Death. I draw another tainted breath. I find I'm staring at a
door for which I have a key and, what is more, this whole

thing stinks. Who really cares what Darwin thinks!
The receptionist gives me a Hollywood smile as she
arranges the rest of my life in a file - and winks.
Have a nice day - I see her say.

One step,
another -
I walk
away.

John E. Rice, Houston, TX

POET'S NOTE:  No, thankfully, not biographical - just a vivid imagination based on other experiences and perhaps knowing I would fly internationally despite some considerable reluctance.
JUDGES' COMMENTS:  The dialogic first stanza, as well as the use of internal rhyme, enjambment and punctuation, invites the reader to continue through the following revealing quatrains where the penultimate stanza carries an enormous punch. Powerful poem, refusing to go gentle into that "good night" so that even each internal rhyme strikes an exclamation mark for life!
EDITOR'S COMMENTS:  Honest, direct, and clear, shatters that fragile mask we each wear to protect us from others knowing of our inner reactions.  Excellent writing by Sol Magazine's previous Poet Laureate.
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America's Courage

New York City was brutally attacked,
The twin towers reduced to rubble.

Manhattan was destroyed
And innocent people lost their lives.

Horror gripped the nation;
The President ordered high alert.

Military troops geared up
As trained rescue people worked.

Americans watched the TV news as
They called loved ones far and near.

All our patriotic citizens showed the colors
With flags of red, white and blue.

A nation banded together decided that
Those nasty terrorists were through.

We waited for them to surrender
When they didn't, we decided to attack.

On a Sunday in October the President declared war.
As a nation we watched, cried and prayed

An ugly war was not what we wanted
But it was the only thing we could do.

Eileen Sateriale, Bowie, MD

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  This well-crafted narrative in couplets takes the reader step-by-step through recent events and concludes with an almost apologetic explanation. The simple structure serves to underscore the content: a matter-of-fact recap of what happened and what we had to do about it.
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E Pluribus Unum - Sept 11, 2001

My heart ached. I was tired of crying,  tired of hoping.
Exhausted from feeling, the day Americans came to my aid.

I stretched to place a coin into an offering, and I read,
"E Pluribus Unum, In God We Trust."

I saw a lone man waving a flag on the overpass of the freeway.
A young boy looking on as his father in a ponytail lovingly smoothed
a flag bumper sticker to the back window of their car.
A woman burying her face in the flag,
and another whose tear sizzled against the wick of a flickering candle.
I listened to those who  too often argued bitterly
about who is wrong and who is right say "we".

I too heard, a president who listened, and who prayed.
I healed a bit, as exhausted rescuer choked up with
"I'm only doing my job."

and I closed my eyes and hugged my child when he whispered,
"We'll be better tomorrow mom."

Tonight, I am not white or black, or yellow. I am not a Jew or a
Christian or a pagan.
I am not Japanese, or French or Danish.
I am not a mourner or a survivor or even a rescuer.
I am, an American just like them, just like you.

In many, we are one.  E Pluribus Unum.

Marsha Rose Steed, Roseville, CA

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Interesting prose-poem.  This personal account describes the sensitive nature of recent events and how bravely this character and this nation, have risen to the challenge.  A mother's emotion-laden account of the gut-wrenching pain and fear, and ultimate call to courage.
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What Is Courage?

What is courage? Absence of fear?
A resolve without trembling or pause?
No; without fear, courage means nothing.
Courage is the conquest of fear.

What is courage? The will to do?
The strength to press on to the end?
Yes; but not that alone; without principle,
Will becomes just destructive cruelty.

What is courage? The noble heart,
That sees what is right and then acts,
That goes head-on with fear and subdues it.
Courage is the strength to do good.

Katherine Swarts, Houston, TX

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Questions and answers in quatrain stanzas work well to describe courage.  Poetic essay on courage conveys insight and invites the reader to deeper reflections.
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Citadels

Here a grandson stands beside me
bravely waving a flag he is just learning.
My hand upon his curly head
I stand tall, chin jutted, look
determinedly to the east.

Here a free air whips our hair about
like red, white and blue in the wind.
We stand tall and unafraid like flagpoles.
The sun picks a gleem from our eyes.

Here and there is where you find
tonight orphans, those who
weep themselves to sleep
through plights not of their own making.
This is where East meets West.

If look you into our eyes, you see
the look of eagles.
If you look closer, you will see
also the tears of doves.

Here is where we feel no fear.
Here is where we feel courage and sorrow.

Claiborne S. Walsh, Montrose, AL

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  This poem is quite aptly titled and uses interesting narrative to depict a strong patriotic sentiment.  Insightful pairings of opposites and well-stated word-pictures impress the reader with a vision of these two "towers," the human citadels who do not hide their feelings and whose courage lights their way.
 


LOVE IS UNIVERSAL

FIRST PLACE Winner of a $10.00 Book Gift Certificate from Barnes & Noble.

Language of Love

Universal Love
So powerful and mighty.
Everyone knows that
When love speaks, the world listens
To one, single dialect.

Eileen Sateriale, Bowie, MD

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Succinct and economic use of words and form
declare a universal truth:  love knows no language barrier. Personification of the concept of love follows a short form commonly used for subjects about love - the Tanka.
EDITOR'S NOTE:  For more about "Tanka," see FORMS.
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SECOND PLACE
Love Must Not Be Choosy

If we want the most from loving, it won’t do us any good
If we base our love’s criteria on a creed or neighborhood.
If we want to use our love to make the world the best we can,
Then our love must be "whatever," not "because" or "if" or "and."
Even fools can love their own kind; even scoundrels love the one
Who thinks like them, and looks like them, and does things that they
want done.
But the truly noble spirit is the one that reaches out
In compassion to the stranger, and the oddball, and the lout.
If we keep on hating others, even our worst enemy,
Then the best that we can hope for "yes, the best there’ll ever be."
Is a world no worse or better than the one we live with now.
Do we want to make things better? Then why balk when this is how?
If we want a world where hatred and its sorrows are no more,
We must open up our hearts and let all others in the door.

Katherine Swarts, Houston, TX

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Good rhythmic structure supports a powerful message of inclusiveness. Beautifully structured with excellent use of end rhyme.  This lyrical poem defines how simple an act of universal love can be.
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THIRD PLACE
Cinnamon Feet

In corners where oppression lives
Love of life helps sufferers survive
On farms, in fields and dusty plains
In deserts too remote
It's love and kindly charity, caring people must promote.
We hear
Sandaled cinnamon feet on cobblestones and pebbly dust,
Trample on in fields of wheat-filled plain,
Enveloped soon by bellowing winds of dusk
Driving ochre gusts of softly biting pain.
We hear
Hunger whispering with a longing lust.
Insidious, it's there in fields abloom
Where only hummingbirds can feed
On nectar drawn by blossoms sweet perfume.
We see
Sullen amber eyes soon seek the moon
Hidden in some swiftly moving cumulus clouds,
Oh, indigo sky of such celestial dreams
I lay me down beneath umbrella trees of glistening green.
We feel
Barely sheltered by abundant leaves of woven shroud
Alone in cardboard box to lie unseen.
And wither there with hunger like a flower dried
Once salient figure full of life, to testify
That life is cruel ...we simply live
No quality of life to satisfy
And then we die.

Corrine G. Schlessel, Woodbridge, CT

JUDGES' COMMENTS: Intriguing title invites the reader to savor each stanza.  Complex yet clear writing, with a sense of both the poet writing the poem, and the narrator telling the story.
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Bi-racial

Asia ...
With his almond eyes
His burnished skin
His gifted, artist's hands

Asia ...
Slight in the arms enfolding him
Holding him tight and
Shuddering against his tense form

Asia's gift is
Growing relentlessly in my
Taut, Caucasian
Belly

Soon to be round
With the result of
Our uncompromising
Love

SJ Baldock, Lancaster, TX

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Good use of repetition entices the reader to continue through this poetic journey of human acceptance and love.
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All You Need Is Love

I caught myself
humming again
in the library,
then looked about
to see
if anyone noticed.

Last time I sang that song
was a thousand years ago
on one of those
scout overnights
where everyone
hangs out around the fire
eating chocolate bars
and burnt marshmallow
wedged
between graham crackers.

Funny
how old songs
come back
when we need them.

Diane M. Davis, Chelmsford, MA

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Delightful reminiscence many have experienced. Evocative childhood memory supported by imagery.
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It Doesn‘t Matter

Your skin is different than mine,
Yet, our skin feels like silk.

Your hair is blonde,
My hair is black.

Your lips are small,
My lips are full.

You have broad shoulders,
I have broad hips.

Your heart beats,
My heart skips a beat.

Your love is unconditional,
My love is too.

Eve Hall, Dayton, OH

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Concise use of couplets and comparison help this
poem reconfirm that opposites really do attract. Imaginatively leads the reader through contrasting images to tell its story simply and directly.
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Ribbons

Can we share one's selfish pain with the wearing of purple ribbons?
This, a sincere and empathetic gesture.
Emotions fathoms deeper, than our eye's view.
There's no greater loss, no more dastardly harm, inflicted.
No meaningless significance, the insanely inhuman evil, portray.
We, are with anger, compassion and vengeance.
All these, not will misfortune, reverse.
In alliance, our spirit invulnerable, setting goals for
a courageous victory over tyranny, discovering
the solutions for everlasting peace and good will.
Peace will prevail, historians have quoted wisely.
No such profundity, by itself, will ring forever true.
Omnipotent Love, as is inherent to life.
The whole of its entirety, suggests a gathering for world unity.
Criminal terrorists, their submission, unfailing.
An era of human empathy and vigilance be our goals.
Reinforced and sacrificed by our hero's bravery,
The world listens to cries and cries with relentless compassion.
Ribbons of empathy, turning to a glorious rainbow for peace.
We need heed to our "Omnipotent"
legacy, ever guiding in our efforts.
Peace will have reigned, and forever kept guarded.
Holding within the boundaries of human decency,
securing our immortal love for a unilateral,
universal family....

Louie Levy, Thousand Oaks, CA

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  The extremely dense, prose-like quality of this poem
encompasses a universe of intense feelings. It attacks its subject from various angles using dynamic images.
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Actions Speak Louder

I failed my Spanish test
Again.
I can't get the hang of this,
using foreign words for things
I know only in English.
I want to work in the Peace Corps
someday,
a day that seems will never come.
And it won't, they tell me, if I don't
have a second language
that I can use.
But I do have a second language,
I tell them.
There's no test for it, and they don't
teach it in school,
but it's universal, just the same.
I know how to love.

Lynne Remick, Nesconset, NY

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Wonderful portrayal of someone who will not take "no" for an answer - in any language.  A proof that love does "speak louder than words."  Nice analogy in simple, clear language.  Effective use of stylistic dialogue to develop the theme.


PEACE IS FOR ALL

FIRST PLACE Winner of a $10.00 Book Gift Certificate from Barnes & Noble

Supplication

Turn away
from the fearsome, fanged faces
of Mars and the celebrated
Stars of War.

Feed fresh corn to
carrion crows and ragged rooks
who last fed on rotted flesh
in the killing fields
of eden.

Let the last lingering
terrible sound
be that clash and crash of
downed arms: sheathed swords,
helmets, halberds and hauberks hurled
into a bottomless bomb crater. Buried!

Take my hand. Stand with me
and sing -
sing the sweet songs
of forgiveness and
Peace.

John E. Rice, Houston, TX

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  A strong plea for peace with vivid images in the first three stanzas contrasting with the simple, yet somehow eloquent language of the fourth stanza. "Stars of War" is a clever turn of phrase. Effective use of alliteration. "Halberds and hauberks" are antiquated weapons, but the use of these images reminds that, no matter how sophisticated modern weaponry becomes, aspects of war can rightly be associated with the Dark Ages.  Skilled use internal rhyme combined with contrasting images of peace and war contribute to an overall well-structured piece of poetry. Bravo!  Truly poetic in diction, this piece lifts the reader with its call to disarm!  Excellent!
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SECOND PLACE
The Rookery

Ribbons of fog rise from the swamp
Encircling a canopy of tallow trees
Covered with nests of wading birds.
Gregarious snowy egrets preen
Flowing breeding plumage.
Spoonbills rise on extended wings
To fish for their brood.
Tri-colored heron fledglings rehearse
Their scraping-grating call notes
The bucolic scene is a prime example
For non-feathered folks
Of creatures of varying gene pools
Living in close proximity
In peace.

Lois Lay Castiglioni, Galveston, TX

JUDGES COMMENTS:  Strong imagery.  "Ribbons of fog" recalls the ribbons of smoke we all remember from September 11, 2001. The poet is clearly aware of alliterative effect.  Lovely naturalistic metaphor works well as a tool to compare the often unnatural lifestyle of humans and the peaceful coexistence of the animal kingdom.  Directing our attention to "lower" life-forms reminds us we have much to learn from their example.  Well-painted word-pictures.  An observant nature poem, good description, with a surprising and fresh conclusion.
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THIRD PLACE
The Same God

If instead of
Dropping bombs
Enemies would
Fly kites
It might be
Easier
To remember
We are
Children
Of the same
God

SJ Baldock, Lancaster, TX

JUDGES COMMENTS:  Invites the reader to focus on peace and to participate actively in its spread.  Brevity, simplicity and obliqueness combine to send a powerful message. Resists proselytizing. In a milieu where we are fast becoming sodden by, and risk becoming inured to, the primal screams of a nation wounded and outraged, this poem's delicate imagery is refreshing. Simplistic form well structured for optimal effect.
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HONORABLE MENTION
We Will Prevail

Be the hand that steadies ours if we should falter.
Be the sun that lights our way when days seem dark.
Be our eyes that we may see our lives renewed past shifted steel.
Be our breath that we may smell the earth beyond these acrid fumes.

Be our voice when we are thunderstuck by terror still unseen.
Be our ears that we may hear some sweeter song than sirens in the night.
Comfort us as whistling winds weave through this now sacred place.
Embrace us with a calm yet fierce resolve to triumph past this gloom.

We are all the stalwart hearts on earth and will not fail
Whatever cost to humankind,
we will prevail!

Corrine G Schlessel, Woodbridge, CT

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Well-crafted cadence, full of lyrical repetition. Almost mystical in tone, peppered with alliterations and near-rhymes, this piece invites us to look to ourselves as the source of strength that can make for a better tomorrow.  Eloquent prayer, topical yet universal.
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Peace Defined

Peace
is a quiet moment
reflecting on beauty
which is all about.

Peace
is the courage to face
problems without fear
of overcoming trouble.

Peace
is the blessing of love,
sharing pleasant hours
with precious kin and friends.

Roberta Pipes Bowman, Fort Worth, TX

JUDGES COMMENTS:  Beautiful use of definition as poetry.  Straightforward and reflective writing, offering simple but time-tested paths to peace.
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The Kindergartener

In uneasy anticipation
We watch from the kitchen window
Until the yellow bus stops by our mailbox
Out pops Alicia, backpack bouncing, arms akimbo
Rushing up the driveway, bursting into the quiet house
Announcing, "Mimi, I'm home.
Papa, I'm hungry."
Peace bubbles up from the wellspring of our hearts.

Kay Lay Earnest, Smyrna, GA

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Slice of life illustrates how anxiety can be transformed into peace by a little child.  Excellent snapshot poem conveys a universal image of nurturing love, peace and concern that could permeate any home, anywhere.  Beautifully rendered. Set in the context of current events, it's nice to be reminded that "peace" has more than one meaning. Comforting. Subtle.
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A Sure Promise

No more sadness,
No more badness, soon.
No more lying,
No more crying, soon.
No more tears,
No more fears, soon.
No more death,
No more theft, soon.
Wars will cease,
Complete peace, soon.

Evelyn Hall, Dayton, OH

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  The use of extended repetition lends an almost chant-like quality to this poem. Sure, steady progression to an ending of all things bad, and a beginning of eternal peace.
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More Than Enough

Peace--
may be short in length,
but it's tall in spirit.

Peace--
may be soft in sound,
but it's loud in sentiment.

Peace--
may be a precious gift,
but it's easy to give

Peace--
may be divided many ways,
but it will never run out.

Give peace to all,
there's more than enough
to go around.

Lynne Remick, Nesconset, NY

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Skilled use of tercet stanzas help to carry the reader toward a satisfying conclusion.  Positive commentary stoutly pronounced.
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Dove of Peace

Dove of Peace
Beautiful Bird
Spreads his wings.
Flies all around.
Olive branch
Falls from his beak
Eternal symbol of peace.

Eileen Sateriale, Bowie, Maryland

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Calls us back with simple symbols to a worthy point.
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Starting Small

We won’t have peace between nations
Until we have peace within nations.
We won’t have peace within nations
Until we have peace between neighborhoods.
We won’t have peace between neighborhoods
Until we have peace with our neighbors.
We won’t have peace with our neighbors
Until we have peace within ourselves.
We won’t have peace within ourselves
Until we stop resenting others.
We won’t stop resenting others
Until we stop thinking so much of ourselves.
We won’t stop thinking so much of ourselves
Until we realize that we aren’t perfect,
That we don’t always know best,
That every human being deserves respect.
If you grieve over hatred in the world,
Beware lest your own heart is contributing its share,
For even the smallest resentment can grow
Until it breeds destruction and tragedy.

Katherine Swarts, Houston, TX

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Peeling the onion, seeking the root cause, this piece methodically bares the source of our plight.  The progression of linked lines and images propels the reader forward toward the penultimate line and grave conclusion.


FREEDOM: NOT JUST FOR THE STRONG

FIRST PLACE - Winner of a $10.00 Book Gift Certificate from Barnes & Noble.

Freedom Is Not a Prize

Freedom is not a prize for the strong.
It is the right of all.
Freedom is not the whims of the majority.
It is the obligation to hear the minority.
Freedom is not the right to keep others down.
It is the responsibility to lift others up.

Freedom is not the license to do as we please.
It is the liberty to do as we should.
Those ruled by desperate clinging to their possessions and privileges
Or by hatred and contempt for others
Are not truly free - they are slaves to their own selves.

The truly free spirit recognizes truth
And is passionately concerned for justice
And knows there is no real freedom for anybody
Until there is freedom for everybody.

Katherine Swarts, Houston, TX

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Eloquent use of antithesis ("Freedom is not a prize for the strong./ It is the right of all.") to develop the theme.   Thought provoking piece with strong imagery.  Concise statements and use of comparison create a strong poetic definition of freedom.
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SECOND PLACE
Freedom Rings

On the outside,
I am caged
in a society full
of intolerance.

On the inside,
I am free
in a place empty
of hatred.

And though I am
not big enough
or strong enough
to erase hatred and intolerance
I am free to wage
my own battle,
free
to smile,
to say a kind word,
to offer a helping hand,
and to show others
they are free to do the same.

Lynne Remick, Nesconset, NY

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Antithesis and paradox provide an interesting portrayal of a speaker imprisoned yet free. Lovely poetic sentiment. Poetic prose poem with musical rhythm and a strong voice.
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THIRD PLACE
Declaration

You may take my Rights
with Laws - all Wrongs.
You may burn my books
and still my songs.

I may spend my nights
on hard stone floors,
locked behind your
Faceless Doors

where naked bulbs
shine fierce above
this cold, dark Place
devoid of Love.

Yet deep inside where
you can't see,
I feel my heart still
beating free.

Use all your
evil Chains That Bind -
you'll never imprison
my soul
or my mind.

John E. Rice, Houston, TX

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Nice cadence helps set the tone for this
strongly portrayed individual.  A series of well structured quatrains, with a sense of melody throughout.  Particularly good image in "faceless doors."
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Rain

Isolated, but nonetheless aware, I
Always knew that elsewhere skies exist
Without thermals ...

My mother's belly was
A comforting ether surrounding me
Until in response to fate I was released

To join with brother paratroopers
And spiral through polluted air
Intent upon a kamikaze flight trajectory

Cleansing heaven of its degradation and
Sacrificing all -- including individuality --
I find myself obliterated

In a community of grimy puddles on
Gritty sidewalks
In grotesque cities far from home

The adversary stretches taut its canvas shield
Protectively against our onslaught and
Carefully sidesteps the minefields of our destruction

Scurrying this way and that and
Ducking for cover to enter the sanctuary of
Tall edifices piercing the horizon

He remains oblivious to our sacrifice
-- what we have gladly given up --
That he might have

He only knows that he is getting wet and
-- head down -- he fails to recognize
That we are giving rainbows

SJ Baldock, Lancaster, TX

JUDGES' COMMENTS: Unity through assonance, alliteration, and near rhyme. Well-crafted use of tercet stanzas to make a strong poetic statement.  Gifted writing.  Interesting point of view.
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Free

Seagulls overhead
Gliding gracefully above
No cares in the world.

Evelyn Hall, Dayton, OH

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  A beautiful haiku using nature as an example for all
humankind.  Strong peaceful vision.  Economical in words, clear in view.
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Freedom

Fearless military troops awaiting word to
Fight terrorism in Afghanistan and
Fiendish enemies hiding behind Islam.
Friends and neighbors all over the world
Fight willingly to help bring down these
Felons who have attacked America.
Freedom is for all, not just for the strong.

Eileen Sateriale, Bowie, MD

JUDGES' COMMENTS:  Excellent Pleiades using powerful images and intense language.  By using this form, the poet draws attention to each line by beginning each with the same letter. The initial words of each line provide a clever mini-summary of the poem.
EDITOR'S NOTE:  For more about "Pleiades," see FORMS.
 




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